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My brother killed a cat today. There was a famous Chinese general who once said that you would truly discover a man through his torture. I have come to disagree. When are we more exposed than when we are in sorrow, ridden by guilt?

My brother killed a cat today. It was a little cat, a black one named Houdini with long fluffy hair and a sweet face. I'd heard of Houdini before when his owner pinned a note to our door when we were out asking if we would like to take him in. She had mistaken us for our neighbor, who has eleven cats. Her name was Holly and she sounded like she was between jobs.

My brother killed a cat today. It was a little cat, a black one named Houdini with long fluffy hair and a sweet face. He hit it with his car. It's a white 1997 Toyota, an Avalon. Our grandparents gave it to us in mint condition (practically), despite over 100,000 miles on the odometer. He put a NASA sticker on it and a sticker that says, "+5 Car of Driving." Before my brother got it, my dad had it for a few short months. He managed to have it crashed by other people twice. I call it Lester.

My brother killed a cat today. It was a little cat, a black one named Houdini with long fluffy hair and a sweet face. He hit it with his car. He had seen it, it had seen him. But there was no stopping at that point. There was just movement and inertia, little numbers broken down into physics f=ma that my brother wants to live with floating around his brain for eternity. He loves those numbers.

My brother killed a cat today. It was a little cat, a black one named Houdini with long fluffy hair and a sweet face. He hit it with his car. He had seen it, it had seen him. Both of them stopped. I wonder if Houdini was thinking about Bulgaria (or was it Belgium) where trafficking law was until very recently that at a four-way intersection, the person of higher rank went first. It used to work when you would have your crest on the carriage, but not so much with cars. Cars don't have crests. They have brute force.

My brother killed a cat today. It was a little cat, a black one named Houdini with long fluffy hair and a sweet face. He hit it with his car. He had seen it, it had seen him. Both of them stopped. And then both of them started up again. Moby has this song called "The Great Escape." I think it was about Houdini the man and subsequently Houdini the cat. The last Great Escape, perhaps, is death. They were going to give Houdini away, so Houdini gave himself away.

My brother killed a cat today. It was a little cat, a black one named Houdini with long fluffy hair and a sweet face. He hit it with his car. He had seen it, it had seen him. Both of them stopped. And then both of them started up again. My brother is made of little numbers. He knows the little numbers that would have saved Houdini. It kills him that Houdini didn't.

A cat killed my brother today. It was a little cat, a black one named Houdini with long fluffy hair and a sweet face. It hit his car. He had seen the car, the car had seen him. Both of them stopped. And then both of them started up again. My brother is made of little numbers. What happens when those numbers destroy themselves?
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EDIT: Lordy-Lou, my first (and likely last) DD. I was honestly surprised, mostly because it's rare for me to put keywords on my deviations. I guess I did for this one.

So, some common questions being answered:
1) This really happened. It happened the day I submitted it.
2) My brother is fine now. At the time I wrote it, however, he was pretty distraught.
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Houdini by ~ObliviousGenius is striking in the way the author uses repetition and subtle changes in detail. ( Featured by !GwenavhyeurAnastasia )
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~RazSketch May 31, 2011  Student General Artist
This puts tears to my eyes every time i read it.
And I've read it a lot.
It is a very well deserved DD. :heart:
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~ObliviousGenius May 31, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you.
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Mood: Love !taniworks May 19, 2011  Student Interface Designer
This actually made me cry too. Maybe because I love cats, maybe because I'm feeling fragile or maybe because it's a fantastic poem. Thank you, I really admire the way you told us so much about your brother through such little hints. I also really love the repetition, I think it makes the differences of each paragraph stand out that much more.

The line "They were going to give Houdini away, so Houdini gave himself away." is amazing. Favorited. I'm going to read it again.
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~ObliviousGenius May 19, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you, though I'm sorry that it made you cry. Thank you for the favourite as well.
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*SilverMender May 8, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Who is the chinese general he speaks of?
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~ObliviousGenius May 9, 2011  Student General Artist
Shan Yu.
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~ObliviousGenius Feb 27, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you.
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^neurotype Feb 27, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
The reversal at the end is just solid. I love how much you tell about the people in this, despite using such a repetitive structure.

I wouldn't mind seeing more physical space between each paragraph, but I thinnk that would look ridiculous on the Internet. Print, then.
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~ObliviousGenius Feb 27, 2011  Student General Artist
There's a solid chance that, like a lot of my nonfiction work, it's better as a spoken piece than a written one. So the space you're looking for is a pause in the recitation.
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